Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login
revert the timeline by pril revert the timeline by pril
some tracks near my home. my fiance and i were walking the dog... and i brought the camera

does the tilt of this work for this or not..
what about post processing work. is it to much or not?

Featured here
[link]

and here (out side DA)
[link]
courtesy of :iconkariiissa:

Similar images:
Add a Comment:
 
:icontaransa:
:icongimmefeedback:

I love this shot.

I am a huge fan of slightly darker pictures - it looks like a bit of vignette too which I love :heart:. I think this really sets a mood for the piece. Spot on there!

I like the angle. I saw you said it was not an eye level shot - I think the angle helps simulate that it was. I am torn on the power line. Yes, I can see how it throws perspective off a bit, pointing to the sky at a weird angle. But my first impression of the picture was of someone who is lost trying to find their way, so in a surreal dreamy way it works (tracks lead home, distractions swirling around the tracks, etc).

Nicely captured, thank you for sharing! :)
What do you think?
The Artist thought this was FAIR
5 out of 5 deviants thought this was fair.

:iconeagle79:
:icongimmefeedback:

This piece is a difficult one for me. My immediate impressions are mixed, as I'll explain. First, though I want to respond to your specific concerns:

:bulletblue: "the tilt": usually a shot that has a tilted horizon drives me absolutely crazy. In fact, I'm the type that has to point out to someone when their horizon is off, even though it's by less than 1 degree. But for this image, the tilt oddly seems to balance the image in an interesting way. It leaves a lot of tension in the image, but not to the point of driving the viewer away.

:bulletblue: processing: From what I can see, I would consider your processing appropriate. I am of course, assuming you didn't masterfully merge four or five completely different photos to come up with this image (and if you did, let me just say that's a damn good job!). Your vignette could be slightly subtler, but that's really just a matter of taste.

The image does present a bit of a problem to me, and it's really one that is more... "heady" than I usually make. It's also one that could be applied to a great many of my own images, so please don't take my tone as condescending. I look at the image and I have no idea what you're really trying "to say". I see a great perspective shot with good rule of thirds composition, good colors, nice contrast... but no real message. Nothing that grabs my attention and says this photo is about ______.

But then, maybe I'm just missing the point. Maybe it's a photo about a railroad track. It's not like I've never done something similar :D
What do you think?
The Artist thought this was FAIR
5 out of 5 deviants thought this was fair.

The Artist has requested Critique on this Artwork

Please sign up or login to post a critique.

:iconblondekatastrophe:
BlondeKatastrophe Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Train tracks always fascinate me. You never know where they lead. I like how you've captured this on what looks like a cloudy/gloomy day. It just adds to the mystery. I love the tilt!! Makes it more interesting. The only thing i'm not too big on is the border. I think it would look better if it was the full image. But that's just me.

:icongimmefeedback:
Reply
:iconla-muerta-bonita:
la-muerta-bonita Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2010
i think the angle makes the photo more interesting than if it were just straight on. the processing also works, it really fits well with the moody sky. i like the power lines too, it compliments the lines of the tracks. good shot :)
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks!! It's been a minute since I seen this one I still love it myself!
Reply
:iconitsangela:
itsANGELA Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2009
I actually really like the tilt in this photo...usually I don't but it works! nice!
Reply
:iconphantaz:
phantaz Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2009
:icongimmefeedback: I really like this shot. :+fav: I love the angle and the darker color scheme is really nice too. Great job!
Reply
:icondarkriderdlmc:
DarkRiderDLMC Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2009
It's not too much
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
I appreciate that, At first I thought it was a bit to much but everyone seems to dig it so i can not complain!
Reply
:iconlime-brane:
lime-brane Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2009
Beautiful shot, I really like the dof on this one. The tilt just makes it look more artistic, more like an abstract shot almost, with lines converging in infinity...
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
wow thanks for the feedback. It's very uplifting!
Reply
:iconmoonsong1126:
Moonsong1126 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2009
Very nice!
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
thanks
Reply
:iconmoonsong1126:
Moonsong1126 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2009
You're welcome
Reply
:iconun-dead-lord:
un-dead-lord Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2009
:icongimmefeedback:

I like how the angle of the horizon seems to follow the tracks. It could use some more objects or substance in the top of the image to balance it out but the weight on the bottom of the image is a nice touch.
I think you did a little too much post processing. My personal appeals are natural looks. And i feel the lighting had been thrown off in a peculiar way.
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks for your honesty i'll consider it in the future :)
Reply
:icongrouchywolfpup:
grouchywolfpup Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
:icongimmefeedback: I adore this photo! :love:
I don't know much about photography, but the one thing that I must point out is where the railroad track exits the picture. (the metal part~ I don't know what its called! Dx)
The way it exits the page at the corner is a bit uninteresting. If it had been moved up just slightly above the corner, it would have kept the viewers eyes on the image a bit more. But the way it is placed here drags your eye right off the page and doesn't entice it to come back.
But other than that, its lovely! I adore the darkness, and the angle = WIN. :D
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
great insight thanks!!!
Reply
:icondr4wnout:
DR4WNOUT Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
:icongimmefeedback:

Truely a great piece. I think the tilt works in this, otherwise it would be quite a plain ol' pic of train tracks I've seen way too many times on DA, but yes, it makes it original. It's hard to notice the darkness of it cause my monitor sucks, but that overcast in the sky adds something, a little bit of atmosphere to it. Very nice work.
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
thank you~!! :)
Reply
:iconscar12345:
Scar12345 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2009
:icongimmefeedback: I think the tilt gives the image tracks a sense of never endingness. Which I REALLY love in this image. Good work :p :juggle:
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks Scar12345
Reply
:iconn1k4r0:
n1k4r0 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2009
from :icongimmefeedback:

i can't find my way out with photos so you'll have a very accurate critique from me (^____^)

the tilt of the image gives me the sensation of "something wrong" but don't get me wrong (ops.. i used the same word two times in a row. did i get a bonus or something?) i like the image and i think that the tilt is good, it's only the sensation that it gives me not an error in the photo.
the focus in the distance makes me think about the "future along the way" and so the overall feeling is "there could be something a little twisted in the future of the path i choose to follow" which is a damn good feeling for a take-out-the-dog-to-his-things-walk photo.
i haven't seen the original colors but if the post processing is responsible of the tones the photo have is a good post processing because it adds to the overall feeling.

so, thumbs up for me

bye
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
thanks you get a bonus!!! lol
Reply
:iconjonathoncomfortreed:
jonathoncomfortreed Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2009  Student Photographer
:icongimmefeedback:

I think this shot ... c'est parfait. The tilt is fine, it gives a unique angle (literally and figuratively) to the picture. The editing is really makes this shot what it is - you did really well.

If you're ever in this area again and it's stormy, try this shot again with some awesome clouds.

Other than that, great job! :D I like the electrical tower, it gives more height definition, like in a tableau you have to have different heights, you did that in this picture.

:clap:
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
oh great idea. it's a path i walk my dog down so maybe i should brave up and walk him during a storm! I can't wait for the snow to come i'll do a winter shot of this too. hopefully!
Thanks for your wonderful words starboydeath you made my day!
Reply
:iconjonathoncomfortreed:
jonathoncomfortreed Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2009  Student Photographer
Awesome, sounds great! :D My pleasure, hope your day was great!
Reply
:iconfixxen:
Fixxen Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2009
From gimmefeedback: The tilt shouldn't be there, I think. Makes the whole picture... confusing. Otherwise, it's a pretty interesting shot; I like the perspective.
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
i'm getting such a 50/50 feed back on the tilt some say keep it some say don't.
with out the tilt it don't have the direct line from the bottom left and it looks more traditional. so i'm not sure!
i might post both!
Reply
:iconmedlilove:
Medlilove Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
I love how the angle is tilted slightly and is blurred up close
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you!
Reply
:iconnoakala:
noakala Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2009
:icongimmefeedback:

PROS:

Postproduction
Tilt
Mood

CONS:

Electric pole (crop to remove)
Focus (invert focus: focus close, unfocus little by little the railway in the distance)
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
The cropping didn't work it removed the impact of the tracks toward the bottom i was thing about editing it out. but advised against ed do to the title!
the focus was all jacked :)
thanks for the honest feedback!
Reply
:iconcgiraldez:
CGiraldez Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
:icongimmefeedback:

the tilt and the postwork turns what could be just a mere snashot in a Fine Art Photo

---

its mood is very good and the POV chosen is the correct one

thanks for sharing it

BTW, I added it to my journal !
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
What thanks a lot!! i added the link to my piece! Thanks again!
Reply
:iconcgiraldez:
CGiraldez Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
you are welcome !
Reply
:iconwolven-goddess:
Wolven-Goddess Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2009   Digital Artist
I love this! It's Moody, but it's not Dark. Which is brilliant.
I'm a photo-manipulator, so I don't know alot about technical things for cameras (like aperture <-- wth is that?).
However, post-processing, this photo is really pretty. The tilt of the image adds direction and focus. Plus, most images like this that you see are flat-horizoned anyways... it's really refereshing to see tilted images every once in a while.
Also, the railway tracks lead the viewers gaze towards the distant clouds.

:clap: Well done!

:icongimmefeedback:
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
yeah i'm getting a 60/40 comments on the tilt.
I don't think it works with out the tilt very well.
either way things to keep in mind for the future shots!

thanks so very much for you wonderful words Wolven-Goddess.
Keep in touch!
Reply
:iconwolven-goddess:
Wolven-Goddess Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2009   Digital Artist
^^ You're welcome. And I'm watching you now ... so I'll definately stay in touch :aww:
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
please do!
Reply
:iconwolven-goddess:
Wolven-Goddess Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2009   Digital Artist
:aww:
Reply
:iconmilarca:
Milarca Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Whoa, I love it :wow: The tilt is awesome and it really makes me feel dizzy :D The colors blend very well and the overall is amazing. I love your icon, btw, the campfire thing is so cool :heart:

:icongimmefeedback:
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
well don't fall over maybe i should of called it the drunken tracks! LOL because i love the tilt! :)
Reply
:iconmilarca:
Milarca Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Haha "The drunken tracks" :XD:
Reply
:icon3xg:
3xg Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2009
:icongimmefeedback:
yeah..the tilting gives an effect to the viewer...surreal or sumtin..
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks i like the tilt too!
Reply
:icondmatsui:
dmatsui Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2009
Looking at your comment i believe the post processing was done well giving the shot a slightly moody look.
As for the tilt of the photo, i'm not convinced i care for it as i dont see the purpose. Had you have taken your picture at eye level (assuming here you didnt) then a tilt might have been more acceptable as it might give the feel of someone trying to balance on the railway tracks.
One thing i would like to bring to attention however is that i find the photo to be a bit to busy, you sticks and poles sticking out of the ground in varies places and an electrical pole? together with allot of bushes trees a building in the distance and what seems to be your main subject, the train tracks.
Also you might want to use a smaller aperture (larger numerical value) to keep more of the image in focus. That doesnt bother me so much though.
What i do like however is your use of the train tracks as leading lines into the image and added with the post processing to establish a mood.
Reply
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
thank you. i didn't take the photo at eye level your correct. i did the tilt in photoshop and other processing..
the reason i tilted is because there are many other distractions in the background with out the tilt so i cut some of the ugly out. some of it i couldn't.. nothing a bit of photo editing won't fix ;) thanks a ton for your feedback
Reply
Hidden by Owner
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks... you don't think the effects are to much do you?
Reply
Hidden by Owner
:iconpril:
pril Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
i appreciate that. i can't wait to freeze our butts off and get more photo's together... i'm going to bring the tri pod
Reply
Add a Comment:
 
×




Details

Submitted on
October 1, 2009
Image Size
951 KB
Resolution
1000×1436
Link
Thumb
Embed

Stats

Views
1,609
Favourites
47 (who?)
Comments
52
×